Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to work as a team than as an individual to succeed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Hard work and doing it smartly is the key to success in this today's world. As most of the successful persons can be taken as the paragon of hard effort. One's victory is always defined by how much he/she is devoted to the task which they are doing. I personally agree with the points that working as a squad would give better results than that of working alone.
First of all, talking about the performance, if anybody is so much passionate about the effort that has been assigned to him then it most likely for him to get victory over that achievement. My personal experience is the best illustration of this. When I was in the 8th semester of my bachelor's degree, I got the thesis that has to be completed within 2 months of time. And two of my friends were given the undertaking to complete the project thesis. We were so much involved in those assignments that it took not more than one month for us to get triumph over that duty. This can be defined as a unit work and which therefore took us to the place where one couldn't imagine to be.
Secondly, hard effort and passion can be defined by the inner tendency of the person to accomplish it. There has been a lot of success stories that can be taken as a case for unit performance. To be more specific let us take the example of "Mark Zuckerburg " the leading pioneer and the founder and C.E.O. of "Facebook". He couldn't have imagined the success of the prevailing social website throughout the world if there has not been club performance. He and some of his friends thought of starting some new communication technology within his school and started this project as his passion. There used to be a lot of difficulties that he used to face during the starting day of the project. Despite being troubled by the hindrance, he and his friends used to work overnight, and then the day came in his life where he could just imagine and get all of his ideal thought fulfilled. This is the best example of how one could get success just by devoting his energy toward duty.
Finally, it can be concluded that the duty and the progress of the endeavor toward the accomplishment is just a matter of time if there has been the unit task involved through that work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, as to, talking about, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49753694581 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62020348096 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477832512315 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2336453186 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1052631579 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.89473684211 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0833825968875 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0290678905336 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494056528348 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0583575240248 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046293025215 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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