Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
The issue of whether advertisements make products look much better than they really are aroused much controversy among people of different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people if were asked, would agree with the statement that the products are better in the commercials than their reality, while others have a negative attitude toward this point of view. As far as I am concerned, I am in agreement with later group opinion. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the arguments to support my view.
The first point to be mentioned is that the main reason that companies advertise their products is that they want to increase their selling scale. Therefore, they use many techniques and ways to make their products more appealing in order to persuade audiences to purchase their commodities. One of the effective technique is repetition which means repeating the one message again and again. For instance, in a car commercial a driver picks up many people through its pass and the narrator repeats what a roomy car all the time, although this car is small, the audiences accept this car is spacious and they buy that. As you see such technique make the advertising totally different from what it is in the real world.
In approaching this issue, apart from the reason given above, another reason that deserves some words is that advertisements usually use the celebrity to advertise their goods. As celebrities are well-known and admired with general people as successful and knowledgeable persons, thus, they trust them and by the product. However, they might regret because of the low quality of the product later. For example, a car company uses the race car driver to advertise their car. In the commercial the driver says this car is speed, as a result, many people encourage to buy this car because of this feature, while this car is not fast at all.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments above, I am of the opinion, advertisements mislead their customers by mean of some special technique like repetition, or use of renowned celebrities to increase their sells, therefore, most of the time the products in the real world are totally different by their advertising.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...this car is spacious and they buy that. As you see such technique make the adverti...
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Message: Did you mean 'buying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: buying
...eed, as a result, many people encourage to buy this car because of this feature, while...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, really, so, therefore, thus, well, while, apart from, for example, for instance, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98921832884 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76642849392 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517520215633 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2127633382 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.4 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7333333333 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219107544684 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795224406549 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575025110406 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138400418968 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722909729745 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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