Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is a known fact that no manufacturer produces goods without the intent of making profit, therefore they advertise to the public to tell them of the products. In order to make large sales, they would go any length to make sure their commodities are sold. However some people argue that the products advertised are as good as they seem, while some others strongly oppose that, as they believe most adverts are just to make the products look appealing.Generally, speaking I agree that most products are not as fantastic as they look on commercials, particularly on pictures and i will elaborate in the paragraphs below.
First of all, the act of advertising is mainly to lure buyers, in a variety of way. We see commercials of products being aired on television daily, with the intent of making the public to believe that the particular product works magic. They go as far as paying actresses to put up a façade. For example, my sister and I watched an advert some months ago, where we were made to conclude that a ladies acne was treated in a period of one week, this made my sister buy this item, as she had battled with acne. After using the product for one month, she saw no positive result.
Secondly, marketing is inevitable for producers of various merchandise as it is a vital part of every manufacturing company. However they deceive the consumers in so many ways, such as the television jingles which they do all the time, although not all manufactures indulge in such, but the majority do. They package their goods in really attractive boxes or packets which appeals to anyone who cares to look at it, meanwhile the item in the box are of poor quality. For instance, last month I went into a departmental store with the hope of buying just a few groceries, then I came across a blender in a nicely designed box, so I bought it because I actually required one, as my previous one went bad. When I got home, I brought it out to use, only to realise the blades were so blunt, meanwhile on the carton, was written all sorts of food it could blend. That left me really disappointed.
In conclusion, it is obvious that majority of the commercials done by manufacturers are mainly to lure consumers just so they can make large sales, meanwhile they actually don't care about the quality of their products.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, look, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65693430657 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7122723036 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564476885645 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.6406761363 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.6 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2666666667 5.45110844103 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19925755428 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610639497651 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456392126222 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11486976579 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558308441803 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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