Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: The most important ways to improve people’s health is to clean the environment.
The issue of whether the most important ways to improve people’s health is cleaning the environment aroused much controversy among people of different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people, if were asked would agree with the statement that cleaning the environment is the crucial factor for being healthy, while others have a negative attitude toward this point of view. As far as I am concerned, I am in agreement with the former group. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the argument to support my view.
The first vital point to be mentioned is that nowadays, many surveys in medical sciences proved that the most chronic diseases stem in the pollution of the environment. Over time people produce a large amount of dioxide carbon by their vehicles and result in air pollution which people breathe every second. By releasing the waste materials to the rivers and other water resources, human has contaminated these vital sources. All of these pollutions generate poisonous molecules and enter our body through the air we breathe and water we drink. As a result, they put people health on danger. Therefore, by cleaning our air and water we could prevent many serious illnesses like respiratory problems and gastrointestinal problems which are spreading among people.
In approaching this issue apart from the reason given above, another reason that deserves some words is that nature or environment provide people food to be alive. Thus, we should take this point into consideration, if we ignore the importance of our environment we may suffer from a shortage of food which is threatening people’s health. For instance, the matter of desertification is serious in my country. Scientist predicted if the government does not take the measure to tackle this issue, more than half of people in my country would suffer from absolute malnutrition, as they are not sufficient land for agriculture and plant the crop such as grain and rice which are the dominant food in my country.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that protecting and cleaning our environment is essential for living healthy lives since there is a real correlation between many serious diseases and pollution of the environment. Moreover, we depend on our environment for food which is necessary for being alive. Consequently, we should care about this issue as a significant matter for protecting people’s health.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, while, apart from, for instance, such as, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1815920398 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9432822786 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529850746269 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.0534087022 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.529411765 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6470588235 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21597409116 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655617828401 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722508239309 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137797479102 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915030959059 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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