Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Movies and televisions are one of the important pillar in leading a society to flourishing. In today's progressive world, as all of the people have access to televisions, they shape their personality through learning from them. Some people believe that programs on televisions have more bad effect on the way young people behave than positive impact, whereas some others hold an opposite attitude. In my view, young people could benefit a lot by watching televisions for two remarkable reasons.
The main reason is that programs with negative contents are allowed to broadcast in televisions. The movies or programs that arrive to television are examined with different experts in various fields to confirm that program validity and truth. People working in this section are responsible to broadcast only programs that have informed content for people. As a result, young people could learn useful information among watching television. For example, when I was in university. I had to complete a project about ancient people. As I had a strong interest in watching TV, I could easily found various documentary about my topic of project. Therefore, without any time wasting, not only I could gather large amount of information, but I also enjoy more to learn something by watching rather than reading boring books. If I had not watched television, I would not found valuable information.
Second, as parents are busy today, young people could expand their knowledge by watching television. In today's competitive world, parents work hard to provide their children with comfortable life, so they have less time to train their kids. Since children are alone most of the time, they spend a lot of time in front of television and consider it as a source through which they can get familiar with people's divers perspectives. For instance, statistics demonstrate that there is direct relation between the amount of positive knowledge in young people and the time they spend in watching television. Researchers' investigation among two groups of people reveals that children who watching movies a lot have behave logically due to they gain vast data about different people, cultures, and countries among watching television. As you can see, television's program can have positive impact on youngster’s behavior.
In conclusion, I do believe that the advantages of spending time in watching television's program in shaping positive behavior overweight the benefits of depriving themselves from watching movies. Not only aren't television allowed to show every program, but also children could expand their knowledge by it. I think that people should pay more attention to watch more television.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ishing. In todays progressive world, as all of the people have access to televisions, they...
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Line 9, column 709, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'behaved'.
Suggestion: behaved
...children who watching movies a lot have behave logically due to they gain vast data ab...
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Line 13, column 206, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...emselves from watching movies. Not only arent television allowed to show every progra...
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Line 13, column 231, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'showing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: showing
...vies. Not only arent television allowed to show every program, but also children could ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2278.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85121330332 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515294117647 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5301303699 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.545454545 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3181818182 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210600260097 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646187364825 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531343737925 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141900752881 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563140925758 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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