Do you agree or disagree with the following statement One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part time job Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Adulthood is not an easy stage in people's life, it needs high qualifications to be able to go through it. One of this qualifications is being responsible which can be achieved by work and having a career. For me, I agree that teenagers and young adults should start a part-time job besides their studies.

First of all, when adolescents take a job in early stage, they learn to be responsible on many facets. They will be partially dependent on themselves rather than their parents and take the responsibility of themselves and people around them as well. For instance, my brother started working in a shop as a cashier during his years of high school and iniversity. His personality became better than before and enriched, so I feel that I can greatly depend on him and always ask for his opinion and support. They also can determine which career they want to start in the future

Second, taking a part-time job in this young age teaches them how to communicate with people. Communication is a skill of a paramount importance to engage with people in general and with co-workers particularly. For instance, many adults can not deal with each other and this may lead to misunderstanding or miscommunication. Besides, they can not reach their goals or understand others' needs. For that reason, learning this skill is very significant to facilitate dealing with different personalites.

lastly, another benefit of taking a job besides studying their lessons and attending school, is that they gain money from work. Although the salary may not be high, but it can be enough to help them take courses to acquire more skills in computer science and leadership as well. From my personal experience, when I was at the university, I started working as a medical writer in an online medical journal and earned money as well as expertise in this field. I could save money that I use it now to buy raw materials for my masters degree.

In the summary, part-time job for teenagers is an exquisite opportunity for them to learn many skills, enrich their personality and gain money.

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Average: 5.8 (4 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, lastly, may, second, so, well, for instance, i feel, in general, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87853107345 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89025572475 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550847457627 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.097735319 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.588235294 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8235294118 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245290520649 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804751534418 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576849521055 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145627121826 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403026876116 0.0645574589148 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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