Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's competitive world, parents are more concerned about how to raise their children to be successful in their future lives. As getting a job is an inevitable part of adulthood life, taking a part-time job would be one of the best ways to prepare for a full-time job. In this regard, the controversial question that arises is that whether taking a part-time job is beneficial for teenagers or not. While, some people may be inclined towards the idea that taking a part-time job would have adverse effects on teenager's studies, others believe getting a job during adolescence would be useful for teenagers. Personally, I am of the opinion that the advantages of taking a job far outweigh its disadvantages for teenagers. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first reason coming to my mind is that by taking a part-time job, teenagers can gain some valuable lessons and experiences that would definitely use for their future. In the work environment, They learn how to manage their income and how to increase their salaries. They learn what motivates them to work more efficiently. They have also obtained some worthy experiences about what are the good characteristics for employees to get a promotion and a raise, as they have witnessed how their full-time colleagues promote at the workplace. In addition, they can impress their employers by being an industrious and team worker employee which enhances their chance to get a permanent position with high income in the near future. As a result, they would achieve more success in comparison with their peers who do not have their experiences.
Another noteworthy reason is that students can save up some reasonable amount of money in the bank as a deposit that would be extremely helpful during university time and also if they decided to self-employed. Nowadays, after finishing high school, some teenagers choose to attend college which costs a lot of money. There are many expenses like tuition fees, purchasing books, and other necessary materials for their studying that need to be covered all by students. Therefore, they can withdraw some money from their deposit and pay these expenses. Moreover, if they want to start their businesses, this deposit would be very helpful as they might not need to take out loans from banks. Therefore, if they had not experienced in this area, they would not have been able to manage these situations
From what has been discussed above, we can conclude that taking a part-time job is not only provides teenagers with some valuables skills and experiences but also they can save money for their future plans.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0067264574 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74022680241 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517937219731 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.103819644 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.055555556 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7777777778 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290291873577 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100903322613 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709600756951 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191734740789 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0801538340233 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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