Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Should we encourage our children to manage their own money in order to make them become financially responsible in the future? I totally support the idea. Practice makes perfect. It is efficient for forming a responsible character to let children manage their own properties. It takes a period of time to obtain the wisdom of money and it can be taught since children were young.
Without practicing, children can have a hard time to deal with comparatively large amount of salary after they grow up. Take swimming for example. It is impossible for a child to swim across a river if he never try to swim. Managing money from a simple begging can help children manage their salary after decades when they grow up.
To model responsible children, give them opportunities to plan and manage their time and owning cannot be skipped. Take pet for instance. Having a pet is many children's dream. If they have to raise pets by themselves, they can know how hard to own a pet and take care of them instead of playing with them only. Responsibilities rise up simultaneously as they manage their belongings.
It is a process to grow up and learn the meaning of money and we can
combine these two things at the same time. Children should know the concept of money fully when they are not mature. Having the full understanding of what money can do and how to save it and spend it properly benefit their future path. Neither saving too much nor consuming too much, accurate value can built through their using experience in childhood.
Enough experience, responsible moral, and complete realization of money lead children to a bright future path and their parents do not worry their managing skills because they had been trained from a very young age. The financially responsible adults do not appear suddenly but need time to breed. The importance of learning to manage money in a young age cannot be emphasized more.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: tries
...hild to swim across a river if he never try to swim. Managing money from a simple b...
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...nd learn the meaning of money and we can combine these two things at the same tim...
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Message: Did you mean 'benefits'?
Suggestion: benefits
...nd how to save it and spend it properly benefit their future path. Neither saving too m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84242424242 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67398444974 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.6282424375 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.0952380952 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7142857143 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.61904761905 5.45110844103 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306580510792 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929323779355 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761112653705 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1624884454 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089438364398 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.