Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, it was easy to identify what type of carrier or job would lead yours to a secure or successful carrier.
Having a secure and successful future is the dream of everyone, and that kind of future is strongly related to what type of career or job the person choose. In my view, it was easier in the past to identify this type of job.
First, people's life were more stable in the past than our life these days. It also had less variable things. Consequently, people can predict what will happen in the future if they chose something as their career. For instance, my grandmother used to live in a village with her family . Her father had a big farm there. He was very rich because of it. All of his children went to a private school, and they used to go on vacation every year. Even after my grandmother got married and my mother was born and grew up nothing had changed. The best job was to own and to work in a farm. The current time is different. Every year there is new thing that will affect the work options. For example, we faced a pandemic last year that had spread world-wide, so the perfect job became the online job.
Second, in the past, there were only a few choices to do, but in our days the world tends to be more specialize. Each small task need a professional employee to complete it. Back to my grandmother time, people had only two choices: to be a farmer or to be a bakery. Now, in a small Cafe, you find ten workers with ten different positions.
In conclusion, I think it was easier to identify which job is better not only because the stability of life they had, but also we have a more specialized life. To add on, I suggest that young people should be careful in choosing their future job because som jobs are more affected by the changes in the world than others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 285, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...sed to live in a village with her family . Her father had a big farm there. He was...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1366.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.30914826498 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33892936235 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577287066246 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.59790635 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.3 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.85 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160360261284 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457461042443 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541021714787 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113445970223 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0714257121887 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 11.7677419355 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.42 10.9000537634 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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