Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives Use specific reasons and examples to su

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Depending on parents to making the decision about life is one of the ideal way to achieve the stable future when parents already get a wealth of knowledge about our characteristic. However, this problem spark the debate that parent only affect the making opinion in the past and up to date children tend to draw their own life. I, as a fervent advocate of children determine themselves statement, assure that it is no necessary for parent to take in the children selection.

To begin with, parents have no ability to keep up with the alteration nowadays which means they will not make the right choice for their kid. Now that the rising of many information have no indicator to stop; therefore, should parents do not take in the considerate in changing, they cannot support their children fully. By contrast, in the past, the world fluctuating is not at high level like to date result in the easily for parent to help their kid by their experience. In addition, the environment in these days is really special, children can meet many effective people such as well-known people, future mentor who already making the inform decision for other people and themselves in their career. As a result, interacting with these people will let children making their right more sound than their parent.

Moreover, the availability of Internet system are the truthful resource, which children are able to access widely and deeply. The Internet help people to bring their sight out to the world due to the wide range of knowledge. Hence, children can accumulate the operating of the world through the screen and somehow form their well behauvior. Most of the children already decide their own dream when the Internet give them an alternative kind of job and sport leading to the less effective of their parent as they usually spend time to working and running family in this fast-paced world. This suggest that children have enough ability to making the informed decision.

In the end, due to the retarded in opening parent observation about the developing of the new world and the powerful of the Internet result in the children making their own choice.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...e for their kid. Now that the rising of many information have no indicator to stop; ...
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Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...e for their kid. Now that the rising of many information have no indicator to stop; therefore, s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 637, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...eople, future mentor who already making the inform decision for other people and themselve...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, well, in addition, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92011019284 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51078617851 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520661157025 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.8048767567 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.571428571 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9285714286 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296149616571 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112036812236 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552742913561 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18725694164 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574846872835 0.0645574589148 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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