Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have. They always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer
The desires of people in regard of either materials or glory are enormous and that is truly phsycological effect. I definitely agree with the following statement that people are never satisfied with what they have for number of reasons and I will explain why in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, the incessant improvement in every single aspect of society urge people to crave for more attractive things. Consequently, every person is profoundly satisfied when acquire some trendy items and possess with the feeling of a subjugation. However, that feeling doesn't last for long and after a certain period of time, the same person express indifference and tedium of things he has. Then, the desire for more even newer items prevails over resistance. No one can deny that every year, there are some well-conceived and trendy smartphones which entices copious individuals. For example, when my little cousin has been given a modern cell phone two years ago, he swiftly became satiated and bored. That spurs my uncle to buy feverishly coveted by him new model. Undoubtedly, my cousin will get tired of that new cell phone in a short time.
In addition, a reason in which people want always more is to stand out in a particular society and show affluence. There is no shortage of opinion that everyone notice what other people own and have which bring about sort of a competition between them. Accordingly, people buy same things they see in others with the purpose to show different group what they acquired. For example, I had a friend who bought a brand new headphoned whose price was exorbitant, instead of using that money for other more substantial thing which might be wholesome. When I asked him why he bought them, he told me that he saw one person at the gym where he goes with absolutely the same nifty headphones. And it turned out that the person has own business with considerable incomes. However, my frined who is at the middle financial class wanted just to looks cool and make impression to other people. If he had not seen these headphones form other person, he would have not spent som much money on them.
In conclusion, I believe that people are indeed taken by other items since they are not sufficient satisfied with current ones and want to have them for themselves. It is because of the consistent development of technologies or other ares. That in turn elicit desire for each of us, which is entirely phsycological effect. Also, everyone want to buy things which he has notices that others have and mostly to look in abreast with the current trend.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 275, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...of a subjugation. However, that feeling doesnt last for long and after a certain perio...
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Line 2, column 316, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...oesnt last for long and after a certain period of time, the same person express indifference a...
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Line 3, column 39, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'want'.
Suggestion: always want
... In addition, a reason in which people want always more is to stand out in a particular so...
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Line 3, column 218, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'sort of'.
Suggestion: sort of
...r people own and have which bring about sort of a competition between them. Accordingly, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, consequently, first, however, if, look, so, then, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, sort of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2138.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82618510158 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61763821397 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541760722348 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0361688674 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1818181818 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1363636364 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22727272727 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226598820914 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674581962666 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0948438157516 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171141786627 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0994691463595 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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