Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It goes without saying in today’s progressive world where we live, go on a trip is the most common activity which people used to do it on their vacations. Undeniably, psychologist believe that, due to the development of transportation in contemporary era, make the travel easier than past. However, they resist in this idea that, each individual are more busy than last decades, so they can not spend much time for traveling in faraway distance and . I am of the opinion that , traveling to abroad have more advantages instead of in own country. The reasons to support my idea are illustrated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, visiting a new country is the key to acquire with new culture and you can find the culture with food, cutomes,languages... Definitely, each county has the special language and costumes which related to their story of advent. In this regard, when the people take the time in a deferent country, they feel the original of history instead of reading ancient book which make them bored. As a result, all the items are connected in a circle and take you to the history. For instance, I had trouble to learn a history of France when I was secondary school as a Iranian person. So, my father and I travelled there for holidays. While, I meet the famous place and traditional costumes and taste their food, my father described the whole history and without imagination, I could touch the sense of history. Undeniably, if I have not ever seen the France as a foreign country, I would never known any information about their culture and history. It seems that, doing this encouraged me to be a history teacher.
Furthermore, in this development of era, most of the people have decided to move to another country for living or make more money. Therefore, if you have a chance to visit another county, you can select the best option. For example, one of my friends had decided to study in Master degree some years ago and he was uncertain about where he could study. In Iran or other country. After a long time, he went on a trip to Russia, Malaysia and noticed that, their Education level are the massive evaluation so he moved on to Russia for continue of education quickly. I am sure, if he could not experience those trip, he still would be Iran and can not gain the being developer in the Google company as now.
In conclusion,having the considered above-mentioend reasons into account, I agree with that content, travelling abroad have benefit more for people. Consequently, I suggest that, young people spend their time on a abroad more, for expanding their experience.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, second, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2159.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78713968958 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81053513391 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527716186253 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8193206968 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1363636364 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.59090909091 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212031508812 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584652803683 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475932599688 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138573601267 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592541991914 0.0645574589148 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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