Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign country

It is clearly understood that nowadays traveling to other country or traveling inside the country is a very important issue for local government. Some people believe traveling is an inseparable part of people's lives, and the government should use this matter for improving their economy. Whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. As far as I am concerned, traveling inside the country can be very useful for the financial situation. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that the economy of one country very much depended on the tourism industry and the government can improve this industry with some effective activity. For example, with the show, the beautiful part of every city to people, and with more advertising can encourage people of the country to spend their free time, or their holidays at this specific cities, also constructed some places for having fun, such as Amusement Park, circuses, museums or Disneyland can be very useful. With all these changes people of country encourage to see their own country and spending money in this way.
Another reason which should be taken into consideration is that is very important for the people of a country to be familiar with other cities' culture, and see every extraordinary place in that cities. I think is very proper to illustrate an example of my real life. I remember when I want to leave my country to keep my study in another country, and better university, I have not seen all city in my country and I was very sad because of that, so I decided to make a plan for this activity, and in the short time I visit all the city. That memory is a wonderful memory for me because after that trip I be able to leave my country with more comfortable, and more memory. I learn many things on that trip and get familiar with many cultures in different cities. Nowadays I visit my country, and many other countries in the world, but I should tell you that, the memory of that trip is something special in my mind and I do not want to be replaced with anything. I believe everyone should see their country, and after that go to another country, because nowhere is like home, and never could be. That's why visit, and traveling inside the country have many benefits for both people and the government.
To put it briefly, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statement, one soon realizes that the economy and financial system in the country are very dependent on people of that country and they can have a very good effect on their own life even with traveling inside the country. In fact, there is a myriad of other reasons, supporting the above statement, which could be mentioned but are not embraced due to the dearth of time.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, if, so, whereas, for example, i think, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2316.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72653061224 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59591515851 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457142857143 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 12.0 1.86738351254 643% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.6407363556 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.666666667 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2222222222 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277477762887 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986832980574 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779469662332 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191652171557 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0154823984441 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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