Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
I agree that it is more beneficial for the people to travel in their own country than to travel to a foreign country. Among many reasons why I hold this opinion, three stand out and will be discussed later in this essay. These reasons are developing the economics of the people’s society, less costs for the travelers and communication.
the first and most prominent reason why I think traveling inside the country is much better than traveling abroad is that this matter can assist developing the economics of the country. This is to say, the travelers need to buy their requirements during their trip from the shopping centers. In the circumstances, definitely purchasing from your own country’s shops can help the economics of your society to get burgeoned. In addition, by thriving the tourism industry within your homeland, it can make a lot of new job opportunities.
Secondly, I want to look at this issue from the travelers’ standpoints and make a comparison between traveling inside their country and taking a trip to a foreign country, from the economic aspect. For example, in a country such as Iran, as all the points of the territory are connected to each other by the roads, it is possible to go to every spot of Iran by your own car that can help you to spend less money, on the other hand, if you want to travel overseas, mostly you are supposed to allocate a lot of money for traveling by plane or the ship. As a result, the former kind of traveling is economically beneficial to a family than the latter one.
The last but not the least important reason for holding this idea is communication. To illustrate this matter, suppose an Iranian family who wants to travel. They have two choices, traveling inside Iran and going to Turkey for a few days and assume that the family members know neither English nor Turkish. Absolutely it is far better for them to choose the first option, because it is so hard for them to make a connection with the people with whom they don’t have any common language. Therefore, if I were in their shoes, I would travel in Iran instead of going to Turkey.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: stands
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Suggestion: fewer
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, i think, in addition, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1761.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72117962466 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75966264465 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517426273458 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9918295745 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.4 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8666666667 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33393043785 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122398398111 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118685841278 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218759903741 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689955781271 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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