Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People communicate with each other less than in the past because of the popularity of television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Over time, with the advent of the television into society's life, plenty of changes have been happening. To a great degree, I agree with the idea that one of these changes is that the time people communicate with one another dramatically decreases. In the following paragraphs, I will illustrate my persuasive reason in this respect.
Firstly, there are a great many of entertaining programs on TVs these days than in the past, so people, especially the younger ones, are able to find a lot of their favorite programs on TV. Therefore, this act causes a person to spend more time watching TV. Hence, he or she does not more time to communicate with people around themselves. My experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a child, there were a few suitable TV programs, so my friend and I had to pay less attention to these kinds of programs. However, while we were growing up, the diversity of programs was being added to TV, and day by day, we were being attracted by TV and would stay at home to follow these fantastic programs. As a result, automatically, the amount of time we were spending with each other fell. If the TV had not become popular, we would have further communicated with friends and other individuals.
Secondly, due to the fact that TV programs, especially news ones, give exact and up-to-date information about countries and the word, the majority of societies try to receive correct news from announcing programs, while in the past, these kinds of news came out among the people, and they would be aware of them through communication with one another. Take my grandfather as a bright example in this regard. In the past, about 30 years ago, he spent a lot of time with other people to gather news about the world. He was crazy about the news about technology and politics. When the first time a communications company established the TV center in my village, he cut down all relations with other people and only put the TV as the first priority in his life. Since then, he always follows this information from TV.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that TV programs' popularity gives rise to a sharp decrease in every society's communications in this modern world. This is because there are varied programs for every group of people, from children to the elder and because the TV acts as a confident source to gather news and new information over the globe.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1974.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71121718377 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71708288469 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510739856802 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.9293281968 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.894736842 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204645526955 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707069262823 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526028205101 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130319821901 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491370784307 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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