Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Most people think that focusing on just one skill is better than trying to improve multiple skills simultaniously. However, personally, I believe that it is worth spending money and time to improve multiple skills, and tend to find the best way to learn new things. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, thanks to new tecknology and improvements of internet and social medias, it is easy to find new sources of information and learn more stuffs about many skills, such as music, social, logic, and math. In fact, learning new skill and developing different skills can help people to incease both their experience and knowledgh. My personal experiment is a compelling example of this. My friend and I decided to start learning the computer programming skill. In the first sight, this skill does not depend on any other skills, but actuelly, the math and logic are both important skills that can help computer engineer to write a program that can be executed without any bugs. Although my friend decided to just study programming, I chose to learn it with all of the other related skills. As a result, we have seen that I have better experiance and the best skill in programming that my friend.
Furthermore, having various skills can pursue someone to make more money and respect. In other words, multiple skills can help person to find the best business opportunity and manage his life better. For instance, we can see that many successful managers have a lot of skills and expertises. They can manage entire company, make their dreams to be true, and expand their businesses. If they have just lernt one simple managing skill, they do not have ability to be a part of big decisions. The role of governments to improve the skills of future managers is one of the essential roles. They have created and managed a lot of efforts to improve the skills by supporting education system. For example, the United states has a very efficient school program to increase the information of students as the possible future managers.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that improving multiple skills is better than just spending time for single skill. This is because of learning new information can be useful to be professional in your job and it can be best way to make money. There are many opportunity for people to learn new skills, and if the person makes a limit for himself, it can be bad desicion for his future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79342723005 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60968681946 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483568075117 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.240580134 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2380952381 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2380952381 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199503987268 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698160627857 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596310297644 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127020400825 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159048083363 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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