Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Providing Internet access is just as important as other services such as building roads so governments should offer Internet access to all of their citizens at no cost Use specific reasons and examples

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Providing Internet access is just as important as other services, such as building roads, so governments should offer Internet access to all of their citizens at no cost.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world, where we are living Internet plays an important role in our daily lives. There has been a controversial debate among people and some politicians as to whether providing free access to the internet is beneficial or not. As far as I am concerned, government should not spend its budget to provide free access to the Internet, and two reasons to support my viewpoint are presented as follows.

To being with, having the internet for free, people especially juvenile will jeopardize their mental and physical health. It is not a secret to anyone that Internet is interesting since provides numerous opportunities for humans to be occupied or facilitate the way they are living. It could be dangerous for new generations since they are more likely to depend on such a way to do their responsibilities or to get rid of their stress through playing online games. No longer will they turn into slothful individuals who do not make effort to do their tasks, which is detrimental for every society because youth are being considered as a powerful and important capacity that can figure out the fate of a country, so it is crucial to protect juveniles from these kind of harms; besides, spending time being online means that people do not move and they have a little exercise; as a result they will be fat in the near future. To put it in more vivid picture, when my younger sister was 12 years old, she was used to spending time using the internet and playing some online games because my father provided her free access to his internet, since my sister did not any concerns about spending money on it, she used to sit on sofa and be online all the time, which made her really fat. Had my father put strict rules about using the internet, my sister would not have such a health problem. As you can see, free access to the internet encourages people to spend more time surfing the net, which is harmful for people especially new generations and youth.

Furthermore, doing this, making the internet free, governments cannot solve serious problems and challenges. It is crystal clear that this practice needs a huge amount of money and governments should allocate a great portion of their budget to do so. Thus, they cannot invest money in practical project such as reducing the rate of poverty among citizens. Escaping from the clutches of poverty should be prioritized in order to have a affluent community, but by devoting money to such a projects, countries cannot experience the taste of welfare.

In sum, having aforementioned example and reasons into account, governments should not offer free access to the internet. Not only will the important part of communities will hurt, but people cannot experience living in welfare

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Average: 7.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ebate among people and some politicians as to whether providing free access to the internet i...
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Message: Did you mean 'begin'?
Suggestion: begin
...ewpoint are presented as follows. To being with, having the internet for free, peo...
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Line 3, column 756, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...it is crucial to protect juveniles from these kind of harms; besides, spending time being ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... should be prioritized in order to have a affluent community, but by devoting mon...
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Suggestion: a project; projects
...ommunity, but by devoting money to such a projects, countries cannot experience the taste ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, really, so, thus, as to, kind of, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2353.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93291404612 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65820982783 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524109014675 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.1126319895 48.9658058833 192% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.0625 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8125 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263155646121 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961845185017 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587873374245 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171701854186 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312419156149 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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