Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict
It is crystal clear that the rules in different societies have been changed over the last decades. Many people hold the opinion that today's societies expected that youth should obey seriously strict rules. I, personally speaking, disagree with this statement. The reasons to substantiate my view are elaborated upon in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the rules in today's societies are often set to save the environment, which makes them very essential. Obviously, each society tries to preserve its natural land and animals due to cultural and religious beliefs. In addition, the people often consider the environment as a heritage from their ancestors and try to keep it alive and undamaged for the next generation. Therefore, the governments always adopt complicated rules, and the people happily and intently obey them. For instance, a car factory was established in my city about ten years ago. This factory needed a high amount of water for its cooling process. Therefore, after establishing that factory, the government of the city adopted new rules to preserve the wildlife near the river. A few of the people, especially the youth, annoyed and found these rules strict. That is because, in the past, people were free to smoke near the river or even swim in the river. However, most of the people intently follow the rules, and consequently, the fish and other animals survived.
Second, the structure of societies has changed during the last years, and therefore, the rules should be complicated enough to control the societies. In the past, simple structure caused that the government governed a country with a small number of laws. Conversely, these days everything is changing rapidly and more complex, and numerous rules are demanded to control different aspects of society, include trades, people's responsibilities, and relationships. My own example can clearly demonstrate this. My cousin is a twenty-five-year-old boy. He lent some money to his friend. After a month, his friend gave him a cheque. My cousin went to a bank to receive his money back. Suddenly he understood that the cheque was a fake one and his friend escape from the city. My cousin's father was annoyed and stated that in the past, there was no significant law related to cheques. However, the police arrested my cousin's friend due to complex laws adopted in the previous year.
To conclude, considering the mentioned reasons, I completely disagree with the statement that the rules of today's societies are too strict for the youth. That is because the rules are essential to preserve the environment, and also the structure of the societies has been changed recently.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
... the government governed a country with a small number of laws. Conversely, these days everything...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, conversely, however, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14055299539 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83169599321 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543778801843 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8853638526 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6296296296 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0740740741 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259544214116 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616733499874 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771967030617 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2011470059 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109352057204 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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