Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

A controversial debate which is every country is that young people should obey the rules or they should enjoy some free. Some groups of people believe that follow the rules are too strict. Other groups believe that young people should follow rules. I concur with the latter groups and I believe that young people should obey the rules in society owing to the fact obeying rules leads to progress society. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.

An exquisite point to be mentioned that obeying rules can make a better society, then a better world. Obeying rules means there are not drug dealers, murders, thieves, and rapists. As a result, the prison may have a few numbers of prisoners and families will become happier. In addition, society will become peaceful that make wheels of industries will be revolved and students in their school and universities will become safe, all that make society more progress.

The second reason is that obeying rules can help people to be more comfortable. In the classes, if students obey their teacher by stoping of talk during their teachers illustrate an assignment, students in the class will become more comfortable and they do not feel upset when someone talks and makes disract the direction of an assignment. therefor, obedience to the rules at school improve the realationships between students and their teachers and demonstrate that students care about their education and show that students respect the academic rules, this means ' no cheating' helps build students are serious about learning. then progress society.

To sum up, I strongly believe that obeying rules in society leads to a better and progress society that is because obying rules will make people safe, comfortable and serious people.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, second, so, then, i feel, in addition, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 296.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07432432432 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44511520908 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496621621622 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 448.2 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.9287076126 48.9658058833 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.285714286 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216991633034 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0960867307251 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800156388075 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138579430775 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907709204824 0.0645574589148 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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