Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
During our life, we are meeting a plethora of people. They might affect our life in different degrees. Various points of view which are germane to the matter being discussed bring us to the moot question whether teachers have more influence on their students, or student are more influenced by their friends. The popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is friends have more impact on the students. There are two cogent reasons I will explore in the following essay.
To commence with, the different between the age category between the teachers and the student made teacher have less effect on students. If we take a minute to ponder over it, each age category have a different perspectives which result from the time that they coincidence it, teachers are older than the students, so they have a different perspectives and thoughts. As a result, they cannot communicate with their students and they can not exchange their ideas. A palpable example, when I was in high school, I and my classmates were cheering for the famous rock and roll band, Stormy band. We were fascinated with their performance. We went together to many concerts in different cities. On day, there was a concert in our city, Lexington, Kentucky. All my classmates was waiting for the day of the concert. When our teacher of math, Mr. Fred, saw us wearing shirts with band photo printed on it, he criticized their music style and he told us not to waste our time and money in listening to this kind of music. Furthermore, he advised us to listen to the classic music instead. We became mad and told him that this type of music, classical music, is belong to his age population, and each age has its favorite music style. Finally, we denied his advice and we went to the concert and we were ecstatic.
Another salient point corroborating my stance is the limitation of time that gather the students with their teacher is not enough to make teacher have an influence in his student. Their time limited to the school time. However, their friends are spending much more time with them. So the opportunity to influence them will be higher. For instance, as I mentioned before, I my friend were into rock and roll music. My passion to this kind of music started when my friend was bringing their Mp3 s with them and let me listen to the music. They were explaining the tones of the music to me in details. In addition, after school, they took me to local clubs where rock and roll was played. Consequently, I became a one of the biggest fans of rock and roll music. Thanks to my friends who have the favor of introducing this genera of music to me. As you can see, friends have more influence on the students than teacher.
To recapitulate, whether teacher are in different age of their students, or the limited time that teachers could spend with their students. Friends have more impact on the students that their teacher.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, furthermore, however, if, so, for instance, in addition, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2392.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69019607843 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51893559354 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456862745098 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.5549760504 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.7333333333 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233476876853 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725573751386 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885806566855 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189049309398 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575605070247 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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