Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep rooms their neat and organized are more successful than those who do not.
Modern world is a place of chaos and organization at the same time. Many people strive to escape from disorder and embrace the order in their daily lives. Some people believe that an organized, clean room is a sign of a more successful student, while others believe otherwise. I absolutely agree with the first group and will cogently explicate my stance on this issue in what follows.
First of all, keeping one's room clean and organized can help them organize their daily tasks more efficiently since everything is in its place. So the better a person organizes his own room, the more efficiently can he can accomplish his daily tasks. Bill Gates, a prominent entrepreneur, once stated that he was not able to reach his current fame and success unless he had an organized room when he was a student. He further explained that he was able to accomplish his daily schedule effectively due to his neatly organized room.
Besides, an organized and neat room can help the person preserve his inner organization and peace. One cannot ignore the fact that the inner world of a person is a reflection of his outer environment. A recent study in Sharif University, a very famous/a prominent university in my country, has indicated that the calmest and successful students were the ones who kept their rooms clean. Many other studies through history have supported this claim and today it seems almost irrefutable.
Last but not least, others who visit a student's clean room would believe in his abilities and organizational skills. This, in turn, would result in others’ trusting that student with essential tasks in the future - which means success. By way of illustration, statistics have shown that eighty percent of Microsoft's student employees, the most successful computer company in the world, had organized rooms. A further scrutiny revealed the fact that the applicant students' rooms were visited by their employers and the persons with the cleanest rooms were hired afterward.
To make a long story short, preserving one's room's cleanliness and correct assortment can help him keep his daily tasks aptly scheduled, and have a better organized and calmer mind. Additionally, this matter can make others believe in the student's abilities due to his convincing room! and assign him important tasks in the future. So based on what have been discussed here, to have a brilliant life and mind, a student must endeavor to have a brilliant room.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s abilities due to his convincing room! and assign him important tasks in the futur...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'while', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.243902439024 0.229887763892 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.159645232816 0.158761421928 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.10199556541 0.0866891130778 118% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0509977827051 0.046263068375 110% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0620842572062 0.0685040099705 91% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0909090909091 0.118717715034 77% => OK
Participles: 0.0421286031042 0.0351676179071 120% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69634275147 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0177383592018 0.0309702414327 57% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.09977827051 0.0887237588012 112% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0243902439024 0.0209618222197 116% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0133037694013 0.0139019557991 96% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2447.0 2387.08602151 103% => OK
No of words: 407.0 408.028673835 100% => OK
Chars per words: 6.01228501229 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.341523341523 0.338922669872 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.248157248157 0.251872472559 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.189189189189 0.174417080927 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.135135135135 0.112833075102 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69634275147 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535626535627 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 60.7873500253 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.35 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2251293994 48.84282405 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.35 120.699889404 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.35 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.35 0.644075263715 54% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 45.1657248157 45.7405998639 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.38211382114 1.45489161554 95% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212971658275 0.300154397459 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114555475091 0.103427244359 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.101683460192 0.0752933317313 135% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.506332967488 0.497263757937 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0990461407635 0.151897553556 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787544179719 0.114077575197 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456896945165 0.0781384742642 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.275447232807 0.336927656856 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0763591428452 0.067059652881 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139612209372 0.210909579961 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448097631111 0.0618886996521 72% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8870967742 151% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.