Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
One of the most controversial subjects, which often provoke many discussions is prosperity in career and professional life. Some people keep endorsing the claim that interaction with other people has more positive effect on success in job whereas others dismiss this idea holding the idea that studying hard is more effective. It is my firm conviction that interacting people provides more success in future career. In what fallows, I will thoroughly elucidate what rationale my perspective is based on.
The first and most significant reason why I recommend this idea is that by socializing we can learn an unlimited skills and knowledge. As a matter of fact, people who have experience in various areas related to our profession are valuable treasures. My own experience as a diligent intern is a compelling example of this. Right after my education, I started working as an intern in a building company whereas my classmates having the same of success prefer to continue their education. Therefore, I was provided to cooperate with famous architects in the mentioned firm and learn perfect executive and designing skills besides business managing principals which I could not get through studying in any university. It is indisputable that how that experience helped me to establish my own designing atelier and become one step forward from others.
The second pivotal vindicating point regarding benefits that people can bring up for us to success in our job is that by connecting more and more people we will face more differential doors and opportunities. To delineate, each individual that we meet can introduce us to more successful people working in our field of interest or even other field which we had not thought of ever. For instance, working as a designer on several projects simultaneously provide me a chance to relate an employer which tends to commence a business in building complexes in different cities. Obviously, if I did not accept his cooperation and attended university in order to continue my education, I would not ever be successful in my career by expanding my business.
To put in a nutshell, in contrast to public belief that just studying is the only key to success in future professional life, interaction can play more noticeable role. Indeed, more interactions reinforced us with wide world of knowledge and skills that are never taught in schools and university. Moreover, social connections benefit us with more prosperous opportunities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 581, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to perfect'
Suggestion: to perfect
...hitects in the mentioned firm and learn perfect executive and designing skills besides ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, whereas, for instance, in contrast, as a matter of fact, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2081.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18952618454 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0246158957 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558603491272 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9406604719 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.411764706 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5882352941 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94117647059 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210583242556 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066116359415 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660098824586 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137331068913 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515978577691 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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