Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Form the past, the education system and families have evaluated some methods to encourage students for better performance in the schools. Although some people claim that offering children money as encouragement is completely wrong, it seems to me that this way is one of the effective methods for the motivation of children for a couple of reasons described in the following.
To begin with, there is no doubt that students need incentives such as gifts or money to enhance their performance in schools. What's more, if students appropriately encourage by parents, their overall performance will be increased.
For example, the statistics show that the student who regularly is motivated by gifts such as money has better performance than other students in schools.
Secondly, if families give students money even a little and learn their children to save their money and manage it, they could help them to enhance their personality growth in their children. Since money management, these days is important skills and people who have this skill are successful in their life. Furthermore, instead of purchasing inessential items for students as gifts, when families offer money to children, they could save and after years, could follow their financial goals. For example, my parents gave me money for each good grade which I achieved at the high school. After a couple of years saving, I purchased a laptop which was essential for me at that time. In fact, giving me money as encouragement, not only helped me to purchase an essential item, but also eliminated a burden on my family for buying a laptop.
Admittedly, some people argue that money as a motivator can lead to creating a materialism culture among students. Nonetheless, if the family clearly introduces their reasons for giving money to students and also supervise this money could provide children with ample opportunities in the future.
To conclude, for the aforementioned reasons I strongly believe that money as a motivator is an effective method for encouraging students for a better education career.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, for example, in fact, no doubt, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21791044776 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84419815275 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531343283582 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7303852881 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.857142857 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9285714286 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0406691875174 0.236089414692 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0183170173274 0.076458572812 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0155670132589 0.0737576698707 21% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0277417072326 0.150856017488 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00648600548331 0.0645574589148 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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