Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Technology has an important role in our lives. There are a lot of advantages of technology which provide us an easy life. We can buy many of our needs on internet and we do not need to go bank for our taxes. However there are also negative sides of technology as well. Some people thinks that technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Others disagree. In my view, technology has some bad effects on children like make them less creative because of some reasons.
First of all, thanks to technology children can access almost everything by using internet. They don’t tend to look for the things that they need. For example, if their teacher give them a homework assignment to search the reason and essence of the subject, they can access the whole answer on web. They do not need to think and they cannot learn the subject. In addition to this, they know they can find everything on web they commence acting nonchalant at lesson which make them less productive.
Second, most of the today’s children are internet addict and spend plenty of time by using this. They waste their time with video games and chat on the web. For instance, in the past children need to find something to have a good time. They had limited tools and they created new plays in those cases.But today, everything is more attractive and no need to think. Also they don’t need anyone they are friends with their phone. This make them indifferent about anything.
In conclusion, there are both advantages and disadvantages of technology . But when we think about the creativity of children, the negative sides are more than positive sides because children cannot control themselves and spend their time with playing not to think.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1451.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83666666667 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47883280807 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0786726327 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.3684210526 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7894736842 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260736403836 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821092368815 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077433749284 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158576849238 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376904003335 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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