Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Television advertising directed towards young children aged two to five should not be allowed Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people argue that there is no problem with television advertisements focussing on the young children and they should be allowed. They cite the basic right of companies to sell their products to support their argument. However, I strongly disagree. I believe that such advertisement should not be allowed as they have bad impact on the children and their parents. I will explain my reasons in the following passages.
First of all, most of these advertisement focussed on the young children are not true to their products size and way they work. For example, a car toy for young children will be advertised in sach a way that it seems to be large in size and one can even sit inside it. Without actually seeing it personally, children assume that they are actually big in size and they can drive that toy. Brain developemnt in such a young age is not that mature and children take the advertisment for the granted. Althought, this case is also true for adults, but they can understand the context of the advertisement and can distinguish between them. It is found in the research that after getting hand on such toy, they not only feel bad but also question their overall faith and decision. That is why I think that television advertisment focussed on young children should not be allowed.
Secondly, advertisement company know that parents will pay any price for their products if the children likes it. They use certain tactic like making product look more bright in color, allowing popular cartoon character to appear to attract the young ones. This is the case with my younger cousin, who always demand for each toy he saw on televiosn, especially those who have his favorite cartoon character on them. They can not understand that how much pressure it cause on their parents’ pocket and the companies. Its hard for parents to refuse their children and the companies make enormous profit out of it. It has become even more difficult when everyone trying to stablize them after the pandemic. Based on this, I think that television advertisement directed toward young children should not be allowed.
The question of whether television advertisment for the young children should be allowed is very complicated. Some people suggest that they should be allowed with regulations from the government and under the supervision of parents. However, I strictly believe that television advertisement directed toward young children should not be allowed.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 23, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advertisement' or 'these advertisements'?
Suggestion: this advertisement; these advertisements
...lowing passages. First of all, most of these advertisement focussed on the young children are not ...
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Line 2, column 223, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: large
...tised in sach a way that it seems to be large in size and one can even sit inside it. Without...
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Line 2, column 347, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: big
... children assume that they are actually big in size and they can drive that toy. Brain deve...
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Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: bright
...in tactic like making product look more bright in color, allowing popular cartoon character to ...
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Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'causes'?
Suggestion: causes
...ot understand that how much pressure it cause on their parents’ pocket and the compan...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
...young children should not be allowed. The question of whether television advertisment for the young c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01466992665 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70198252853 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476772616137 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.6304467192 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.2272727273 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5909090909 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68181818182 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272171484759 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103244405115 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0995271428222 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21127594212 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769267858199 0.0645574589148 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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