Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny that are both positive and negative aspects of television advertising directed for young children. If I was forced to choose, I would definitely agree with this statement, for a number of reasons, that I will develop and explain in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, young child are immature, they believe everything that someone tell to them. For example, when I was younger, like 3 years old, I know that I was used to see a lot TV cartoons, but, I also know that I couldn’t understand nothing, sometimes I laughed but, just because another one laugh too. When we are on this age, we just play and enjoy the moment, and after, when we’re older, we remember only few things. For this reason, I really agree that TV advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed.
Secondly, when we are children, we only pay attention when the advertisement is about some toy or some cartoon that we are used to look. Furthermore, we just stay there and look to the things that is happening, we can’t understand that is just an advertisement, to sell us a product. I also have a example for this reason, when I was 4 years old, always that I saw an advertisement of my favorite toy, I start to ask my mother it, and when they couldn’t give to me the toy, I was really upset.
Finally, another reason, we want to do everything that appears in the advertisement, because we want to be like the people who appears. When we are young, we want to be the same person that are closes to us, like a famous actor, or our father, a soccer player, etc. However, we are influenced by this famous people, and this is a really bad thing, because no matters what this person do, we will do it also.
In light of the above mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that television advertisement directed toward young child, shouldn’t be allowed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 161, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to seeing'.
Suggestion: used to seeing
...er, like 3 years old, I know that I was used to see a lot TV cartoons, but, I also know tha...
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Line 2, column 236, Rule ID: NOT_NOTHING[1]
Message: Double negation. You probably should say 'anything'.
Suggestion: anything
... I also know that I couldn’t understand nothing, sometimes I laughed but, just because ...
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Line 2, column 530, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d young children should not be allowed. Secondly, when we are children, we only ...
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Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to looking'.
Suggestion: used to looking
...ut some toy or some cartoon that we are used to look. Furthermore, we just stay there and lo...
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Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ment, to sell us a product. I also have a example for this reason, when I was 4 y...
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Line 4, column 402, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ters what this person do, we will do it also. In light of the above mentioned reaso...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, as for, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59281437126 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71737721117 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511976047904 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.1433244648 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6923076923 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38461538462 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173158206408 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814571757391 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847655958344 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120653109072 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487178559017 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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