Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Finding an adequate job is indispensable part people's life in modern era. When it comes to the question whether nowadays, it is important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct, people adopt spread spectrum of attitudes depending on their characters and educational backgrounds. On the one hand, there are people who adhere to the belief that working correctly is the most key element of becoming a successful person in their career; on the other hand, others believe that taking risk will aid people to make them selves stand out among others. As far as I am personally concerned, the latter carries further weight since not only does it assist them to use economy defects in favor of them selves but also does it help them to earn more money.
Taking risk the most key element of successful businessman. In fact, taking risk allow people to show off their skills and talents in using the drawbacks in economy in favor of them selves. In other words, the economy always have some ups and downs in particular period, which is an appropriate time for people who are risky. For instance, inflation rate is sporadically increasing in my country nowadays resulting in unstable market, as a result of which several people who are able to take risk, can use this instability in market to earn money. Furthermore, some businesses requires to be done quickly in order to be successful. For example, people who establish a restaurant in remote era have more chance to be successful than people who come later Consequently, provided people want to be successful, people should be able to take risk in their jobs.
Another benefit of taking risk is that it makes our lives more interesting. Nowadays, jobs are becoming more repetitive thanks to the advent of computers, internet and other technological advancements. In fact, people's lives is more monotonous and boring without any excitements, as a result of which they need to bring some excited moments to their lives by them selves. So taking risk in their jobs will assist them to make their lives enjoyably since it always involved in several unexpected consequences. For instance, a simple workers can invest his money in stock and earn large amount of money over a night and buy an apartment which it was his dream. Subsequently, people lives will be repetitive, unless they can take risk.
To wrap it up, taking risk is more advantageous than doing work slowly and correctly since not only does it assist people to be more successful in their career but also does it aid them to make their lives more excited and enjoyable. Therefore, if I want to embark on a career, I prefer to take risk in order to earn more money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...es life in modern era. When it comes to the question whether nowadays, it is important to work quick...
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Message: Did you mean 'themselves'?
Suggestion: themselves
...hat taking risk will aid people to make them selves stand out among others. As far as I am ...
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Message: Did you mean 'themselves'?
Suggestion: themselves
...them to use economy defects in favor of them selves but also does it help them to earn more...
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Message: Did you mean 'themselves'?
Suggestion: themselves
...ng the drawbacks in economy in favor of them selves. In other words, the economy always hav...
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Message: Did you mean 'themselves'?
Suggestion: themselves
... some excited moments to their lives by them selves. So taking risk in their jobs will assi...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'worker'?
Suggestion: worker
...ed consequences. For instance, a simple workers can invest his money in stock and earn ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in fact, in particular, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2271.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83191489362 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.654020584 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474468085106 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.4761274658 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.166666667 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1111111111 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.55555555556 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162338206786 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611102547448 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844784516856 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127370092279 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0712375761356 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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