Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shortage of opinion on the impact social activities and sports play in our lives. In my opinion, I feel that both social activities and sports should receive equal funding as classes and libraries. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First and Foremost, sports provide an avenue for us to exercise our body and maintain a good shape. Joining a sport group is very pivotal for our health. More importantly, it helps to reduce our body weight and improves blood circulation in our body, which lower our chances of being ill. Drawing from my own personal experience. When I was in the secondary school, I had a friend named John who was overweight and because of his size, he was slow and sluggish in carrying out tasks. Additionally, because of the excess fat in his body, he finds it very difficult to breathe sometimes. My classmates usually call him "Mr Big", because of his body size. He tried to lessen his weight by avoiding fast foods and processed foods, but it actually didn't work. One day, I advised him to join our relay team, that practicing with us will help stay in good shape. We usually have two hours practice session everyday, which involves 1 hour running session and 1 hour gymming session. Within six-weeks that John joined our sport team, he lost about 36 pounds. He felt very happy and strong about it. Based on this experience, I strongly feel that joining a sport group is very crucial to maintain a good body shape and a healthy life.
Secondly, participating in one or two social activities can be very profitable on the long run. Moreover, it can be your source of livelihood. For example, when I was in the secondary school I was part of the drama group. I joined the group because of the fun, little did I know that I'm actually building the foundation of my career. In the university, I studied Electrical Engineering. After graduation, I was unable to get a job. I learnt some computing and management skills to improve my chances of securing a job, but still couldn't get one. One day, I saw an advert online, a drama company looking for an actor. I applied and prayed to God that I will be shortlisted for an interview. Three-weeks later, I was called for an interview and was part of those that came out successful. That was how I started my career as an actor in Nigeria. After 6 years of working with the drama country, the CEO was highly elated with my performances. Consequently, he referred me to his friend, Mark, who is working with the Hollywood in New York. Later, I was sent to New York to work with Mark in Hollywood. It was in this job, that I earned my first foreign currency, dollar, and I felt very happy about. If hadn't joined the drama group in my secondary, I might still be unemployed by now.
In conclusion, I feel that both sports and social activities should be given an equivalent amount of money as classes and libraries in the universities and colleges. This is because the former helps us to maintain a healthy life and a nice shape, and also can be our source of income.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2536.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 555.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56936936937 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63020729656 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497297297297 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 777.6 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 30.0 9.59856630824 313% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3016124367 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.5882352941 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3235294118 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11764705882 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115378309956 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0324509907246 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053423365216 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110283099272 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686754584424 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.93 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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