Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A college education is a long and arduous process, and it is important for students not only extract maximum benefits of this challenging time but also being able to enjoy it. Personally, I think that universities should sponsor sports and social activities equally with classes and libraries. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in this essay.
First of all, through social activities pupils can obtain communication skills that are necessary in order to excel in the modern world. These days, the majority of businesses are based on teamwork, and if a person is able to effectively cooperate with his co-workers, he could be rewarded. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a pharmacy school student, my classmates and I participated in a variety of social projects. Through this experience, we learned about the importance of supporting each other and being capable of compromising. I am a pharmacist now, and if my colleagues need to switch, I am always ready to help them. Moreover, although sometimes I argue with other associates about ways to improve our work routine, I listen to their suggestions carefully and consider their opinions. As a result, my team is one of the best in a company and my employer has often praised me for great outcomes.
Secondly, exercises can help students to maintain their physical and mental health, which is crucial for young people if they want to be successful. When pupils feel great, they can easily keep up with their studies. For instance, I recall that my education in pharmacy school was exhausting. I came through constant learning and numerous nights without sleep. However, my institution had a well-equipped gym where I could work out and relieve the tension after lectures. Not only that, but I was a member of the school`s volleyball team, where I always had fun with my teammates. During our games, we joked around oftentimes and just had a great time together. In this way, I was always in a positive mood which helped me to perform well in a class.
To conclude, I strongly believe that in colleges, sports and social activities should receive the same financial support that classes and libraries do. This is because it will help students to interact with each other and stay healthy.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i feel, i think, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92802056555 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84594528708 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568123393316 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5082066548 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2857142857 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5238095238 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16484283373 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518910145081 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.098961066341 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136746802086 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105439967397 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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