Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Universities should give the same amount of money to their students sports activities as they give to their university libraries Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

Essay topics:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities
should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities
as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and
examples to support your opinion.

No one deny that investing much money in university libraries is very important because they give many useful materials and books for students. Nevertheless, sport activities are equally important for students because these activities help students relax after many hard-working days and makes students’ lives more healthy and balanced. Thus, I believe that university should spend the same amount of money in students’ sport activities as they invest in libraries.
To begin with, it is obvious that playing sports is a good option for students when they want to relax instead of playing video games. Learning in universities is so hard and difficult. There are many assignments, quizzes and tests everyday which have a big effect on students’ final grades. Thus, they have to study very hard for these tests or assignments to get the best grade they want so they usually have a lot of stress when studying in universities. Sometimes, students study so hard that they seem to look older, thinner and even weaker which involve many diseases. Therefore, encouraging students to do leisure activities is essential to help reduce their stress. My own experience as a pupil is a compelling of this. When I was in grade nine, I had to work very hard to pass the high school entrance test. I spent all my day doing my assignments and homework to improve my score. At that time, I gave up playing table tennis to pay much attention in my study. I usually got up early in the morning and stayed up late at night to learn hard. Finally, I passed the entrance test as I desired but I seemed to look not good every time. If I had spent just a little time playing sport, I would have been better and it would not have affected much on my test.
Secondly, playing sports helps students avoid many undesired diseases. Studying all days forces students to sit on the chair all day which can lead to a lot of sickness. These students tend to hurt their back and have more chances to be obese. Moreover, learning in universities also requires pupils to use their computers a lot so these students are also likely to be short-sighted. Thus, to help students avoid these diseases, university should hold some leisure activities. To do that, they should invest much money in these activities so that students feel interested and join them. For example, my high school now is the only gifted school in my city. The learning environment is good and teachers here are very friendly. Because this is a gifted school, pupils have to study very hard to take many valuable prizes in Vietnam and international competitions. Besides, my school also invest much money on our leisure activities like building the stadium, many table tennis tables and many other equipment. We now can have many spaces to play sports in my school. Therefore, although students in my school study extremely, we always look healthily and never complain about anything in my school.
In conclusion, the university should give the same amount of money to sport activities as they give to libraries. This is because it has a good effect on student’s lives and health.

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 232, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...are many assignments, quizzes and tests everyday which have a big effect on students’ fi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 987, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun equipment seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much other equipment', 'a good deal of other equipment'.
Suggestion: much other equipment; a good deal of other equipment
...e stadium, many table tennis tables and many other equipment. We now can have many spaces to play sp...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2594.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 535.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84859813084 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66914578912 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456074766355 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 801.9 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.8678298085 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4666666667 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76666666667 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235687198218 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730611355272 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971299772978 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218871024787 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105768649631 0.0645574589148 164% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.