In modern world education sector became more commercial and most of the companies or industries hire the candidates with higher degree for jobs. In my opinion, a university degree is not really necessary to become successful. Hard work, patience and strong determination are enough to become successful. Many people became successful with their innovative thinking and skills in their respective fields.
The best examples for hard work and patience can be seen in film industry. Many film actors, actresses and co-workers they do not possess higher degree and they became successful with their inner talents and hard work. Moreover, these people became a role model and got admired by most of the people. For instance, a telugu comedian from India named sri Bramhanandam achieved Guiness World Record for his different role of action skills over more than 700 films in the span of 15 years. He is most inspirational and best example for telugu people. In addition, film industry is robust it takes lot of time to gain experience and it is very difficult to get a chance to play a role in a movie, but if he shows his/her genuine talent impress people they will get famous very soon.
The next thing is self-employment with greater efforts can achieve success. Self-employment includes fine arts like music art crafts, stage shows etc. There are lot of people working as self-employers they increase their business and providing jobs to many people. The best example is Mark Zukerberg who was the owner of world renowned facebook website. He is bad at studies dropped out of college with his courageous efforts and innovative thinking he introduced a social networking website and within a short time he became a young billionaire. He is successful to his career and he does a lot of social service and he provide lot of jobs to many people in the entire world.
Finally, University degree is not compulsory to become successful the strong will power and patience is enough to acquire success. If one learns lessons from failure he can be the most successful person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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..., but if he shows his/her genuine talent impress people they will get famous very...
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...people they will get famous very soon. The next thing is self employment with g...
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.... He is successful to his career and he do lot of social service and he provide lo...
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... and he do lot of social service and he provide lot of jobs to many people in the entir...
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... patience is enough to acquire success. If one learns lessons from failure he can ...
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...can be the most successful person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, moreover, really, so, for instance, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94555873926 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5811068925 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538681948424 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6130234285 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8888888889 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3888888889 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151021327593 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528818679776 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397824307892 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099634404772 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0208748624171 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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