Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After high school, students should have at least one year to work or travel.
It's better than attending university straight away.
By and large, in the modern society which we live in, the paths that students step in can severely affect their future lives and of importance is for students to spend their time more efficiently after graduating from college. There are a plethora of people who are in the conviction that students should be allowed to have at least one year after college to work or travel, while others take a radically different point of view and assert that students should attend to the university immediately after their college graduation. To the extent that my personal perspective is concerned, I accord with the first group. among countless reasons which give adherence to my opinion, I will delve into the most conspicuous ones in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, should students have one year free from all the arduous class assignments, they can refresh and attend the university they desire with more enthusiastic attitude. students like many other hard working people, need relaxation. my sister for example entered university immediately after college and she was completely frustrated with all the assignments and requirements. she always complained about how she never had an opportunity to relax and how each step forward exhausts her more.
Secondly, spending one year after college working and gaining experience can broad their insight about their future vacation and field of study. For instance, I myself worked in a construction company before entering the university which not only did this period help me to develop a better understanding about my desired field of study, but it also provided me with a more vivid picture of the future of it. working with cement made me realize how costly this process is so I decided to devote my time on finding cheaper materials that could supersede cement and have the same workability in the same time. after 2 years of studying and hard work, I came across with rice husk ash which could be replaced be cement up to 10 percent without reducing its strength. Had I not worked that one year in the field, I probably wouldn't have been able to come up with this noble idea. that one year also made me realize how much being an engineer can be exciting. before that, I was hesitated about my field of study and took it for granted, since it seemed merely laboring for me at that time. The keen competition to apply for the desired part time vocation among students, had also made the matter of job experience more important. Nowadays companies place a premium on those who have a more prosperous job related background and spending one year to work can come handy in student's part time job request.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons and explanations leads to the conclusion that its of importance for students to take one year off from studying and devote this time to other activities for it can provide them a deep insight of their future field of study and also they can refresh their minds and bodies and attend to the university with more enthusiastic attitude.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, at least, for example, for instance, in short, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2531.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92412451362 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62258902069 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490272373541 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 803.7 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.3980229343 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.611111111 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5555555556 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243973816152 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832951010555 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690016183873 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162446338836 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414240577342 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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