Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because the world is changing so quickly people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past Use specific reasons and examples to | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to

In all of the world technology is progressing day to day and people should be better to adopt this circumstances. In this regard, some people are of the opinion that changing world by high pace, it’s not good and majority of the people are less delighted or less satisfied with their lives than the past. On the other extreme of the rope, others think progressing technology very fast is very useful and impact on their moral. When it comes to my stance, by weighting pros and cons, I firmly hold that lives is not enjoyable for people in the past. In the following paragraph, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my points view.
As the first and paramount reason, the education system developed and it can help people to learn easily and also to share knowledge. In other words, when science progresses, a lot of equipment is made and help people to do better daily work. For instance, empirical research conducted by some master student at many universities shows as science has progressed, the number of people dying by illness has declined more than ever. As a matter of fact, advancement of science helps people to improvement medicine for disease. Therefore, the more science we have, the more efficient and high-performance people will have.
The second reason is that, advancement of technology don’t allow children to get in trouble, because they have fun with internet, computer game, watching TV and something else. To shed more light on this matter, when children don’t have a playmate they can use computer or internet for entertainment. A significant example that strikes in my mind in about my experience. When I was child, not only was I alone, but also I didn’t have enough friends so I used computer and internet in my free time. Hence, if children in past had had new technology, they would have played with that system.
To wrap it up, all the afore mentioned reasons lead us to conclusion that changing world can help people to advancement science and technology. Moreover, changing technology and science are used to make life better and people now are very cheerful or satisfied with their lives than the past.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 4, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
In all of the world technology is progressing day to ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 525, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: had
...y free time. Hence, if children in past had had new technology, they would have played ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, for instance, as a matter of fact, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86141304348 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68729941661 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527173913043 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2826638122 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.235294118 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315550096145 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977330096318 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102234154487 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200682831283 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988549479964 0.0645574589148 153% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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