Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Cars have made a greater impact on society than airplanes
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion
Waking up at home located around the suburb area, driving to the workplace at the metropolitan city, and taking a short road trip to nearby mountain on the weekend. Sounds like a typical everyday lives of many modern people. Can you imagine a life like this without a car? I bet you cannot. Throughout the history, a variety of means for transportation has been invented, but non them has affected our lives as the cars do. Therefore, I agree with the statement that cars have influenced society more greatly than airplanes because of two reasons: cars have changed peoples’ everyday lives and had impact on greater number of people than airplanes.
First of all, following the invention and dissemination of cars, many of the city’s problems have solved. For example, the overpopulation problem of the metropolis city centers is solved as people become to be able to move a further distance in a much shorter time with their cars, and be able to commute from further distance. According to a population research of Seoul city held by the governmental research institute, the population of the satellite cities surrounding Seoul has grown over 30% after cars have been widely disseminated, following with 20% decreased population of Seoul city center. Another example of car solving city’s problem is that they contributed to lessen the unemployment rates. To be specific, a variety of jobs followed with the emergence of cars. Not only the labor needed to produce cars in factories, but also cities needed huge construction works to be done. With that, cars make it easier for unemployed people to find a new job. That being said, cars have a huge impact on our daily lives, and society.
It is true that the airplanes were a revolutionary invention that eliminated the barrier between countries and connected the world. However, that revolutionary impact was put on much smaller number of people, compared to cars. When we think of taking an airplane to somewhere, the experience itself is considered a special one. It is hard to deny that the price of taking airplane is still very high, and even for some people, it is high enough to giving up taking one. There are still many people who have never been to the airport. On the other hand, almost everyone had ride a car, eventhough they do not possess one. Riding a bus, or a taxi is now so common and cheap, so it is making many more peoples’ lives convenient. Therefore, considering the number of people who are using the vehicle and actually get a benefit from it, cars have much more influence on our society then airplane.
In conclusion, cars inserted much more impact to our society than airplanes, in a way that they solve a variety of city problems, and that they reach out to almost everyone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 198, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'life'?
Suggestion: life
...weekend. Sounds like a typical everyday lives of many modern people. Can you imagine ...
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Line 5, column 575, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'ridden'.
Suggestion: ridden
... On the other hand, almost everyone had ride a car, eventhough they do not possess o...
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Line 5, column 575, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'ridden'.
Suggestion: ridden
... On the other hand, almost everyone had ride a car, eventhough they do not possess o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2314.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88185654008 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7572927648 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53164556962 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0030214009 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.608695652 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6086956522 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21249889831 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585290209453 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595060899009 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129138661686 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572524181857 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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