Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People have been arguing a lot regarding whether the development of technology benefits society. Personally, I think that with the help of technological devices, educating kids is easier now than before. I think this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, technology contributes to the academic success of young people, which is important in order to excel in the modern world. These days, educated individuals have wonderful jobs and high income, and so they can financially support their families. My niece`s experience is a compelling example of this. My niece is a senior and she is going to become a pharmacist, and therefore she studies a lot. Recently I noticed that she spent a lot of time on her cell phone and expresse my concern about this to her parents. However, they told me that on her phone she has special apps such as flash cards, that help her to learn difficult chemical formulas, which she needs to memorize in order to pass on of her entire exams. Although sometimes adults complain that their children devote too much time to their electronic devices, they actually help pupils to increase intellectually.
Secondly, through social networking websites, youngsters can get encouraged to participate in the life of their communities and become supportive and kind adults. For instance, my son is a member of many groups on Facebook and Instagram. A few months, through one of these groups he met young people who volunteer in our small town. Some of them help at a local fire department, others assist a nursing home. The guys told them a myriad of stories about their social activities and my son decided to follow their way. As a result, during his spare time, he volunteers at a local hospital. In fact, this activity made him more compassionate to people than he was before.
To conclude, I strongly believe that technology makes it easier for parents to educate their children. This is because it helps kids to grow intellectually, and become kind to others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ellectually, and become kind to others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i think, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91884057971 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80694969739 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591304347826 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5416341244 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3157894737 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1578947368 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63157894737 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13182983206 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036309667032 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0299004455753 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0720844471726 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165249691518 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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