Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Relation with people is essential to our progress and well being in the contemporary era. The ability to communicate with people is a service that is especially vital to the prosperity of employees and success. Therefore, the ability to relate with people is more important than studying hard for success in a future job because with relation the person can get many opportunities and get a chance to improve himself.
First of all, in my opinion it is widely understood that there are high competitions between people today. So, the ability to build a nice relationship with other is the single greatest determinant of our success to reach our dream job. In fact, communication with others can provide a starting point from which we can develop clear target objectives of what to do in order to work in a good position because people can help us with their experiences and relations. For instance, from friends we can know what to do in the job’s interview. Additionally, they may recommend us to their boss and helping us to progress. In contrast, person whom depends on the books will face many obstacles in the future because he lack the ability to pave the way for satisfying relationships later.
Another reason why I advocate that building nice relationships with people is the optimal way to get good job in the future that is a well-established fact that the person who have many friends has a good character that enable him to talk and discuss with strangers. Moreover, that will prepare him to work in a team and stimulate his creativity. Additionally, relationships with others make the person more flexible and easily to adapt to any new situation so he will feel more convenience in any job and under different circumstaces. On the other hand, the persn who lack the ability to realte with others will miss many chances to enhance his vision toward truly improving his achievment. Consequantly, the person with friendly personality will attract people to work with him.
To sum up, by relation everyone can reach his goal and get his dream job. Hopefully, more people will recognize its significance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 720, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'lacks'.
Suggestion: lacks
...many obstacles in the future because he lack the ability to pave the way for satisfy...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, in contrast, in fact, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93593314763 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89615374056 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509749303621 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2900060675 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.75 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4375 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259228920635 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900193006259 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774317666188 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177191743243 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104345747627 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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