By and large, in the modern society which we live in governments are obligated to There are a plethora of people who are in the conviction that governments should allocate monetary support in favor of environmental protection rather on promoting economic development, while others take a radically different point of view and assert that the priority of budget expenditures should be focused on economic development rather on environmental protection. To the extent that my personal opinion is concerned I accord with the first group. Among countless reasons which give adherence to my opinion, I will delve into the most conspicuous ones in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, the degradation of environment can impose massive expenditures on governments for it can cause an array of diseases which will require costly treatments. For example the air pollution and unfriendly environmental trends in Tehran, a city with a population of 20 million, is responsible for the prevalence of respiratory diseases in the city, as most health experts state. Though Tehran is fairly well developed economically, neglecting the environment has resulted in the respiratory infection and even death of many each year, which has forced the government to spend massive amounts of money on the health system so it can provide efficient treatments for those who are struggling with this issues. Had the officials placed a premium on the environmental protection, they wouldn't had to spend millions of dollars each year to treat sick people.
Secondly, spending money on environment protection programs can benefit both humans and other creatures in the same breath since this world is not merely for humans to thrive and enjoy. Caring for other creatures, not only will help them to flourish but it will benefit the humankind in long run. Take bees for Example, they play an indispensable role in the environments natural circle. They help flowers and plants to pollinate more efficiently and therefore help farmers to enjoy a fruitful harvest.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons and explanations leads to the conclusion that allocation budget for environmental protection by the governments can be both cost effective and beneficial for human kind and other creatures in the same time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: opinion
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
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Suggestion: wouldn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, as for, for example, in short, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06712959469 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572222222222 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 104.500664538 48.9658058833 213% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 160.5 100.406767564 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 5.45110844103 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13749544048 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445032482288 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460640819492 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.088399360118 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504563611445 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 11.7677419355 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 58.1214874552 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.99 8.01818996416 125% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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