Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The debate on whether people should choose secure jobs or wait for satisfying professions has garnered a range of views. Nowadays, many are adamant that a myriad of elements should be taken into consideration to check the constructive and destructive facets of this issue. Some people posit that having a secure job is a crucial step toward better opportunities. On the other hand, some others take the opposite side and disagree. From my vantage point, I agree with the former group and aver that person should acquire secure work if he/ she has the chance. I feel this way for reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
The first exquisite point to be considered is the stable income. Individuals in society often complain about their financial situations; therefore, a secure job would be a great opportunity to start earning money and improve their financial situations. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. After graduating from university, I did not find any job in my field. However, I had found a job in a customer service company that is not close to my field study, but it provided me with money that I needed to pursue my master's degree.
Secondly, another reason which deserves some words to say is that a secure job usually equips people with work experiences. Individuals obtain many skills and tools from this kind of job, For example, solving problems and communication skills. A vivid example that can shed light on the subject is one from my brother's experience. When my brother was in an elementary school, he started working in a supermarket in the neighborhood. Although the job was for long hours and it was not satisfying, my brother's personality had improved remarkably. All in all, all kinds of professions would provide people with pivotal skills and tools.
To wrap it up, contemplating all aforesaid reasons, one can soon realize the importance of getting a job even if it is not satisfying to acquire experience and have a stable income.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to secure'
Suggestion: to secure
... debate on whether people should choose secure jobs or wait for satisfying professions...
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Line 11, column 477, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...hough the job was for long hours and it was not satisfying, my brothers personality had improved r...
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Line 13, column 117, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... importance of getting a job even if it is not satisfying to acquire experience and have a stable...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, as for, for example, i feel, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00591715976 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85740006445 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579881656805 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2313492686 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7777777778 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254714188238 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736181120446 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474929491068 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144467886914 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498157325388 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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