Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Whether they are adult or young children, to use money effectively requires complicated skill. Some people believe that if children organize their money at a young age, it would probably help them to become responsible for spending money when they turn adults. On the other hand, others think that the exact opposite of this. From my point of view, give a chance to young children to owe and manage money on their own is not that beneficial for the following reasons.
Above all, the problem will distract a child from their lessons. Instead of doing their homework to expand their knowledge, they also have to worry about the money for tomorrow’s meal because they have to tackle it by themselves. This could affect the child's studies harmfully. Moreover, if you decide to give money to your young child to manage it on their own, it would be impossible because they are not capable enough to stop them from eating many candies or things they like. The results could be worse than you imagine, the child would be lost their money or waste it on unnecessary things would cause a real problem in the communication between you and your child.
Another reason is that the thieves could robber your child because of the money which gives fear to a child, not the experience. I think it would be better to allow a child who has a responsibility to take care of themselves because it is more crucial than the ability to spend money efficiently. For example, even though I started owning money when I was in tenth grade, I never struggle to manage it.
All in all, manage their own money may harmful for both health and the mindset of a young child. Despite the advantages of it, I think the cons outweigh the pros of it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: "requires complicated" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'complicating' or 'to be complicated'.
Suggestion: complicating; to be complicated
...dren, to use money effectively requires complicated skill. Some people believe that if chil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, moreover, so, for example, i think, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 306.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65032679739 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44596654928 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535947712418 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4290359185 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.642857143 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239643214308 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849732717083 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680666452366 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150959374282 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628289879219 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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