Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
It goes without saying in this unexpected world where we live, people are struggling with economic problems and they have to manage their own money. While some people believe that people should learn how to manage their money as young as possible, others have an opposite point of view. I firmly agree with the former group. To substantiate my view, two significant reasons are being elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the world is filled with various financial unexpected problems, people can pass these situations through if people are learned how to manage their money at early age. Every one of us is experiencing many different unpredictable situations in which we have to spend a lot of our own money. Therefore, if we are learned to manage and save money at young age, we can handle financial dilemmas perfectly. For instance, my cousin had stock in a boomed company, after several years this company had on fire so that the company dramatically lost its many equipment and products. Since my cousin has learned to manage his incomes at young age and has saved much amount of his own money, he overcomes these problems so that his company resumed to produce its company as many as before.
Secondly, it is a fact that children who are learned to manage their money probably will propagate their incomes in the future. By learning how to manage currency as young age as, people can save money from early their ages to middle ages, then they can invest their money into a business so that with the passing of time they will earn much more income without any attempt. For example, my father had learned to manage his money from his father. When he was at fifty age, he started to invest in online shopping and now earn three times money.
In conclusion, taking two above-mentioned reasons into account, I firmly believe that children should learn to manage their money. By learning how to manage money at young age, not only can people pass difficult financial problems through, but also they can propagate their saved money by investing them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84269662921 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45420755137 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497191011236 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2308067041 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.933333333 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7333333333 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354708795133 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137832913482 0.076458572812 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706016431259 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247793196061 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252883506411 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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