It is undeniable that parents have played a significant role in children's lives. However, in my view, I stand with the point that there is a decreasing dependency between young people and their parents when arriving at the decisions on their own lives. I believe there are two reasons that can account for this trend.
First of all, there was very limited information source in the past before the Internet comes in a wide use of searching information. Therefore, when young people were facing some important situations and yet they were unfamiliar with, the best way for them to get the answer or advice was to ask their parents for help. On one hand, parents were more experiential in every aspect because they lived longer and learned more things comparing to youngsters themselves. On the other hand, with no help from the large database in the Internet in the past, parents were the most trust-worthy source of knowledge. Consequently, young people depended much on parents when making important decisions in their lives. In comparison, nowadays, people can search whatever they need on the Internet, so the way they get to learn new things is no longer limited to their parents. This definitely leads to a more independent decision-making process. Take choosing college major for an example. In my parents’ generation, with no computer and no Internet, it was time-consuming to understand all the details of each college major. Therefore, my father fully relied on his parents when making this decision. Now that he had no idea where different choices would lead him to, it was best for him to trust his parents to make the decision for him because they were more experienced. Nevertheless, when it was my turn to decide my college major, the situation was totally different. Living in the booming era of the Internet, I could receive any information I need to make the decision. Therefore, when not knowing which to choose, economics or business management program, I simply typed ‘economics vs business management college program’ on the searching website. Suddenly abundant of information shared by professional professors or students who have attended those programs popped out. By looking into the information, I could make my own decision without my parents’ help.
Furthermore, the relationship between parents and children have changed a lot over time. In the past, the society considered parents had the supreme status that children could not challenge. However, with the education of freedom and democracy, children learn to think and act more independently, which makes the relationship become more mutual. For instance, when my father was still an elementary student, what the school taught him was to obey whatever the adults said. Even when he was at home, if he dared to argue with his parents, they would slap him in the face as a severe punishment that would deter him from challenging them again. Gradually, he learned to obey and listen to whatever his parents said, and even when it comes to making the decisions of his own lives. Whereas, in today’s education, schools encourage students to think independently and take responsibility for their own lives. Therefore, young people have learned to make their own decisions since little.
In a conclusion, I agree that young people nowadays are more independent when speaking of making the decisions of their own lives. For one thing, they can learn as much as information they require to make the choice from the Internet besides listening to their parents’ advice. For another, the society nowadays encourage young people to learn and act more independently since youngsters should take responsibility for their own lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 198, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, whereas, as to, for instance, speaking of, first of all, for one thing, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3134.0 1977.66487455 158% => OK
No of words: 606.0 407.700716846 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17161716172 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96155895361 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9221566427 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447194719472 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 969.3 618.680645161 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2268666429 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.466666667 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63333333333 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338616912501 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1090231871 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116460840006 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269718191969 0.150856017488 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492645253712 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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