Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Every day we make many decisions that impact our future life. Some groups of people may think that in the past young people were more independent to make their own decisions. However, other groups may take the opposite point. From my vantage point, I firmly believe that young people are freer to decide what they wish from life. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint by discussing two main reasons.
In the first place, teenagers and young adults have more access to a variety of information and sources of knowledge to rely on and make a conclusion about a problem. They can sit in front of a computer and search for anything that they are hesitating to do. We can find much information about how we can accomplish a job or what is the destiny of people who were in the same position that we are now. We can share our ideas and ask our friends and experts what to do and consult them with our problems. In this world that are filled with much information and news, do we need to depend on our parents to make an excellent decision?
On the other hand, young people in the past lacked such ample sources of data. They were surrounded only by a few people that considered as an expert in their towns and in some rare circumstances they were gifted by intelligent parents, which would offer them some advice. They did not know what to do in a harsh time and how they supposed to make a right decision. They were confused with their life, and only a minority of people who contribute their passion and interest to the reading books and university were able to outline their future life and achieve a successful life.
Besides, in the modern-day young people are not forced to follow their parents' way. They are free and independent to choose the way of their life. In the past, young people relied on their parents' career. If a rural kid's father were a constructor, the boy would choose to be a constructor as well. If his father were a carpenter, the safer choice for the children would be the parents' career. They could not choose a painter as a career, even though they had appropriated talent. Besides, the emotional bonds between families were stronger and tighter. The entire goals of children were gathering the most respect from their parents. They even married a girl who was chosen by their parents before. In contrast, young people in the modern-day, leave their family in the age of 18. they rent an independent house far from their parents and start their life without any contact or communication with their parents. They cannot stand the intervention of their parents in their personal life. Young adult's life nowadays is separated from their relatives, and even though this caused many problems in their life, it is inevitable and predictable.
In conclusion, whether by developing the internet and social media or weakening the family relationship, young people are more independent and make their decision free from parents will. They do not consider their parent as a mentor anymore and make their decision alone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...they supposed to make a right decision. They were confused with their life, and only...
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Line 4, column 781, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...y, leave their family in the age of 18. they rent an independent house far from thei...
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Line 4, column 995, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
...r parents in their personal life. Young adults life nowadays is separated from their r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, may, so, well, in conclusion, in contrast, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2525.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 534.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72846441948 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51630001596 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464419475655 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0684002223 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0689655172 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4137931034 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.93103448276 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356031764562 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111419601111 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889776626627 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229628561743 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547115152041 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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