Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, no one can deny the importance of working. Some people may hold the opinion that it is sinificant to work quickly with the risk of making mistakes than more carefully doing job with wasting more time. But others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, obviously, working more quickly is better but you should have enough percise in your work too. My reasons and samples listed below will demonstrate my point according to the most common viewpoints.

First let us look at what a person can typically gain from accomplishing his or her work quickly. When he or she finishes his or her job, finding more time for other activities is one of his or her awards. Even there is some mistakes, correcting them is possible because time is avalible. By way of illustration, when I worked for one company, I had to wirte one report for my boss. I did it quickly and my boss let me to left office two hours early and spent more time with my family. As you can see, finishig my work quickly gives me some advantages.

There is also a more subtle point we must consider. If you do your duty and your works in fewer time, you can prove your ability to others and it causes more promote in your job. Taking my brother for example, he has worked for suger factory as a worker for five years, but he is a manager in one part of his suger factory. Thanks to doing his work in limited time he recieves more salary now.

Finally, I cannot oversee the fact that doing your work quickly also means more mistakes and mistakes make us a expert in our jobs. It goes without saying that, if you try to do not risk and do anything in slow process, you cannot learn new things and you do not gain any new experiences. For instance, my friend who works in office thinks doing work slowly is better because he does not make any mistake in his work. But after several years he does know enough invaluable knowledge in his major.

Drawing upon the reasons, although there always some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that the benefits working quickly and make mistakes are more than its disavantages if you avoid to carelessness during your works.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 212, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are some mistakes'?
Suggestion: there are some mistakes
...ities is one of his or her awards. Even there is some mistakes, correcting them is possible because ti...
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Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...eans more mistakes and mistakes make us a expert in our jobs. It goes without say...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'for example', 'for instance']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.190366972477 0.229887763892 83% => OK
Verbs: 0.176605504587 0.158761421928 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0642201834862 0.0866891130778 74% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0779816513761 0.046263068375 169% => OK
Pronouns: 0.133027522936 0.0685040099705 194% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.112385321101 0.118717715034 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0435779816514 0.0351676179071 124% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.37126595839 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0183486238532 0.0309702414327 59% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0481651376147 0.0887237588012 54% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0229357798165 0.0209618222197 109% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0114678899083 0.0139019557991 82% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2177.0 2387.08602151 91% => OK
No of words: 397.0 408.028673835 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48362720403 5.86048508987 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.284634760705 0.338922669872 84% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.19395465995 0.251872472559 77% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.11838790932 0.174417080927 68% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0654911838791 0.112833075102 58% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37126595839 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536523929471 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 60.4513788289 59.2087087015 102% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.85 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9671161559 48.84282405 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.85 120.699889404 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.85 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 39.245465995 45.7405998639 86% => OK
Elegance: 0.89349112426 1.45489161554 61% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430506648282 0.300154397459 143% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0847359474296 0.103427244359 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0771974027105 0.0752933317313 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.451107917803 0.497263757937 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.164955218134 0.151897553556 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131514127017 0.114077575197 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911959271072 0.0781384742642 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.262200701431 0.336927656856 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0636484093755 0.067059652881 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270830662479 0.210909579961 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401325967823 0.0618886996521 65% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Also, I uses he or she instead of only he in second paragraph and it causes to more pronoun. Is it better to use only he in my writing?What's your suggestion?

Even there is some mistakes, correcting them is possible
Even there are some mistakes, correcting them is possible

if you try to do not risk
if you try to do something without risk

Sentence: Some people may hold the opinion that it is sinificant to work quickly with the risk of making mistakes than more carefully doing job with wasting more time.
Error: sinificant Suggestion: significant

Sentence: As far as I am concerned, obviously, working more quickly is better but you should have enough percise in your work too.
Error: percise Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: Even there is some mistakes, correcting them is possible because time is avalible.
Error: avalible Suggestion: available

Sentence: By way of illustration, when I worked for one company, I had to wirte one report for my boss.
Error: wirte Suggestion: wire

Sentence: As you can see, finishig my work quickly gives me some advantages.
Error: finishig Suggestion: finishing

Sentence: Taking my brother for example, he has worked for suger factory as a worker for five years, but he is a manager in one part of his suger factory.
Error: suger Suggestion: super

Sentence: Thanks to doing his work in limited time he recieves more salary now.
Error: recieves Suggestion: receives

Sentence: Drawing upon the reasons, although there always some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that the benefits working quickly and make mistakes are more than its disavantages if you avoid to carelessness during your works.
Error: disavantages Suggestion: disadvantages

flaws:
You only talked about the advantages of 'work quickly', but ignored the disadvantages of 'making mistakes and work slowly' or advantages of 'make sure that everything is correct.' . That's the reason you got warning message: 'The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.'

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1730 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.358 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.273 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.35 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.218 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5