Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents job Use specific reasons and examples to support your answ | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In this furious era which the living circumstances are extremely hard and prices are in their peaks it is vital for the children to have a strong supporter in their life. In my point of view, it is good for children to select jobs likewise their parents’ jobs. I think this way for a couple of reasons which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, children can boost their level of income by using their parents’ experiences as they had the same occupation. In fact, parents can give advises and tell their children to use which kind of strategies to absorb customers and how to increase fund. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I have a job the same as my father job which both of us use to sell televisions. at the beginning I did not know how to sell my goods in a profitable price and could not absorb many customers which made me very nervous. In the contrast my father had lots of customers and was earning high amount of profits, so I told my father and he willingly shared his tactics and experiences. At the end I could reach my income rate in satisfied extant.
Secondly, having the same job as our parents have will indicate intimate relationships among family members which lead to family binding. Children make more contact with their parents while they pursue the same task and job as their parents have including sharing obstacles, and exchanging goods. As an example when I had the same job as my parents had and we were near to each other I could meet my parents for various reasons and for several times during one day. my father advised me and solved my problems. Whenever I was free I went to my father shop and start conversation with him. This example demonstrates how similarity in jobs lead to making close relations among family members.
In the conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is better for the children to opt the same jobs as their parents have. This is because that children can enhance their extent of income by using their parents experience who have the same job, and because job similarities boost the family relationship.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
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...ich both of us use to sell televisions. at the beginning I did not know how to sel...
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Suggestion: My
...s and for several times during one day. my father advised me and solved my problem...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, likewise, second, secondly, so, while, i think, in fact, kind of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59416445623 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58758719882 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488063660477 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1304924617 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2222222222 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9444444444 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34801507719 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129732830922 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104989383539 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263263452284 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718144356428 0.0645574589148 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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