Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
All kinds of affairs/events, small or large, have great impact in the world around us, doesn't matter if it relates to us or not. personally, I believe that it is extremely important to have knowledge about the things and events happening in the world around us. I feel this way for two reasons, which i will explore in the following essay.
First of all, events connect us to the world around us. It works as a hook which binds us to various things and people around us. One cannot evade from the events happening around him or her by simply ignoring them. We interact with people and things by reacting or responding to various events. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. About five years ago, i was a twelfth standard student, preparing for my higher secondary board examination. While preparing for the examination, i used to attend to many mock test exams for a better understanding of the examination procedure. One day, while attending a mock test, i came across a teacher who was the invigilator of the exam. I couldn't understand the format of some questions. The teacher was so much helpful in explaining the format in the solution class after the exam. Later i found out that the question format was actually very important and he was a certified examiner of the board exam. He was surprised that i was not aware of the changes in the question format. As he mentioned, the changes in the question format was published earlier in the national newspaper. I was not aware of it because i didn't read the national newspaper regularly then. Thus, it is so much important to be aware of the events happening around us.
Secondly, events which seems not related to us might not seem interesting to us. Humans are more susceptible to laziness than any other form of activity. We always tend to find the opportunity to relax and take a break from the current work. Thus, things or events which seems unrelated to us, gives us a negative vibe and pushes us away from that. For instance, a workshop on road safety won't be that much of interest to us if our course curriculum is not related to road construction or civil engineering. As I'm a student of non STEM track, it might seem the right workshop to avoid. But, it might also be a wrong choice to avoid the workshop. The workshop might teach us important safety measures which all of the citizen should follow while being on road. The workshop might also introduce us to techniques which we should follow in case of an emergency situation. All of this important information might not reach us if we don't show the potent interest in the events happening around us.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is extremely important to pay heed to the events taking place around us. This is because events connect us to our surrounding world and events seemingly unrelated to us might be more important for us to participate in.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2398.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65631067961 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66773786887 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464077669903 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 749.7 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.6064605965 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.9333333333 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1666666667 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06666666667 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189987719108 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584663218256 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636569326507 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146530861762 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395398367204 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.