Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
All around the world there are important dicisions that are decided by governments which affect peoples lives considerably. One of the most essential question is on which field the country's budget must be devoted. Some people are of an opinion that an internet access is the major considerable problem in nowadays society. While other believe public transportation is more crucial aspect of life for the folk. Personally, In my opinion the fisrt subject is more important because of several reasons, both of which will be mentioned in the following essay.
To begin with, these days most of the juveniles have their own businesses on the net specially on the Instagram and Facebook. Therefore, they need sufficient internet speed and accesiblity to sell their products on these social networks. By supporting online firms we can reduce the traffic jam from streets so there is no need to improve our public trasportation. There was a survey in my country in which scholars study on young individuals' job. Almost %70 of them work on the net or in the compony which use the net to sell their comodities and services. So it is governments duty to help these young people since they are who build our country's future, the next generation.
Secondly, most of the people talk with their family on the mobile phones. Using Skype, Telegram, and other applications needs powerful world wide web. Imagine a lonely mother who has a boy studying abroad. She must talk to her son every day and as you know it costs a lot of money if she want to use a regular telephone device. Besides, it is enjoyable for her to see her beloved son's face while talking. For instance, I remember when my brother studied his master degree in a foreign country my mother used to call him on Skype and it made her happy. For three day, the net was not availible in our country and because of that my mother was anxious for three day since not being able to talk to my brother. Therefore, it is crucial to have sufficient access to the internet all over the country.
To make the long story short. according to the aforementioned arguments having a significant access to the internet is more important than public transportation. while most of the juvenile work on a net or in a companies which used internet to sell their products and services. In addition, most of the people rely on the online applications for communicating with each other specialy who have a person in other country far away from them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 303, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...ccess is the major considerable problem in nowadays society. While other believe public tra...
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Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...you know it costs a lot of money if she want to use a regular telephone device. Besi...
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Line 4, column 30, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: According
...country. To make the long story short. according to the aforementioned arguments having ...
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Line 4, column 79, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'significant access'.
Suggestion: significant access
... to the aforementioned arguments having a significant access to the internet is more important than ...
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Line 4, column 162, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...e important than public transportation. while most of the juvenile work on a net or i...
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Line 4, column 209, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a company' or simply 'companies'?
Suggestion: a company; companies
...ost of the juvenile work on a net or in a companies which used internet to sell their produ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, you know, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75174013921 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68635615392 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519721577726 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.196173263 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0434782609 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7391304348 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180919237486 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482804131191 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447506788096 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110681796603 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264231809155 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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