Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
All over the world, the internet play the most important role in our lives. By galloping rate of science and technology we can`t turn a blind eyes on numerous effects of the internet in our daily lives, although it`s a little hard to reach a cinsensus about this issue, however, in numerous circles of researchers and experts, whereas some are inclined toward the opinion that, it`s more important for governments to spend more money for developing the internet. On the other extreme of the rope, opponents believe, governments should spend their money in order to improving public transportation. While both sides have their own position, from my vantage point the first attitude carries more weight that I will explain bellow.
To begin, the first point I`d like to make is that, nowadays people and the internet became close relationship which people can`t live without the internet, in addition, the internet makes our lives more comfortable and easier from the past. For instance, people surf the net for research, study, entertainment such as playing online games or even they obtain money by using the internet and without any access to the internet they lose their job. My own experience is a compelling example of what I mean. I had a research last semester, and if the internet didn`t exist I couldn`t do my project, on the other hand, I surfed the net and I did my projects as soon as easy as possible.
The second reason coming to my mind to sustantiate and indicate my stand point concerning this issue is that, we can use the internet in order to decrease our transportation. Let me illustrate that in other words. Some activities like shoping became easier. If you have an access to the internet, you can shoping online instead of go the stores, so you can buy products when you are at home, therefore, you can study online, or exsersice online without going to the school or gym. Based on what I mentioned, you can do many activities in your home.
Drawing upon the reason, although there are always some exception which are excluded from the general rule. I agree that it`s more important and essential for governments to spend their money to developing internet access. To recapitulate the reasons, all of the people can`t live without the internet, also they can do anything without any need for transportation and change their location.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y obtain money by using the internet and without any access to the internet they ...
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Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...like shoping became easier. If you have an access to the internet, you can shoping online...
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Line 7, column 258, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...et access. To recapitulate the reasons, all of the people can't live without the inte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, for instance, i mean, in addition, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99004975124 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7493009523 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52736318408 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.0363938214 48.9658058833 186% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.375 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.125 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.875 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247888546924 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083817692541 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798072757551 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157396176398 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420175958523 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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