Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

By and large, parents have always been looking for the most efficient ways of raising their children and teaching them different abilities such as responsibility. There are a plethora of parents who are in the conviction that allowing children to take care of an animal can promote their sense of responsibility. To the extent that my personal perspective is concerned, I disagree with this notion.
First of all, all creature's lives matter and endangering an innocent animal's life to make a point which can be though by many other ways seems selfish. In other words children, due to their undeveloped minds, are incompetence to take care of an animal and may end up hurting them.
Putting children in charge for taking care of an animal, hoping that they would finally figure out how to take care of it, seems unethical and even in some sense ruthless. For example, my mother bought a small chicken for my little brother, hoping that somehow he would connect to the chicken and be more aware of the consequences of not being responsible literally. Little did she know that my brother though of the poor animal as another soulless toy, that he can do whatever he wants with it. The poor chick was dead in matter of hours after being purchased, for my little brother had no idea about its needs and ,well, its flexibility to being resistant to my brothers aggressive action. Had my mother thought my brother this matter without sacrificing the poor animal, the chick wouldn't suffer from a painful death.
Secondly, animals can be hurt and die easily since taking care of them requires more than just being responsible and this event can pose a lot of stress on children and endanger their mental health. In other words, children can sometimes form immediate emotional ties with the animal and since they are not emotionally ready to deal with the loss of a beloved one, this loss can cause alot of emotional problems for them. As an example, I had a duck, when I was 5, and one cold winter day I heard the noises that the duck was making so I decided to take him out of the yard and bring him inside the house. I remember vividly that I put him in a box but, as it turned out later, unfortunately the duck had got out of the cartoon and had spent the night beside me, under the warm sheets. As a fat kid, seemed like I had rolled over him during the midnight and killed him. It wasnt until the morning that I realized that and cried for almost three days in a row. What were my parents thinking when they were buying me that duck. Not only was I incompetence to take care of it but I was also not ready to deal emotionally with his death.

In short, all the aforementioned reasons and explanations leads to the conclusion that taking care of an animal is not a suitable way to teach children responsibility for the animals death can put alot of pressure on them and also since this action an array of abilities, childrens incompetence can result harming the animal or even its deat.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 70, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
...ives matter and endangering an innocent animals life to make a point which can be thoug...
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Line 3, column 615, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... brother had no idea about its needs and ,well, its flexibility to being resistant...
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Line 3, column 784, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... sacrificing the poor animal, the chick wouldnt suffer from a painful death. Secondly...
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Line 4, column 874, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
... during the midnight and killed him. It wasnt until the morning that I realized that ...
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Line 6, column 176, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
...o teach children responsibility for the animals death can put alot of pressure on them ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in short, such as, by and large, first of all, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2453.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 537.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56797020484 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53288693608 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500931098696 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 770.4 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.0550198192 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.105263158 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2631578947 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178045128282 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604227605955 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045409518576 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118700446906 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432344506881 0.0645574589148 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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