Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents have a heavy responsibility towards their children, as they have the first and the most profound effect on their children`s characters. In addressing the issue of preparing teenage children for their adult life, I firmly agree with the statement that one of the best ways for parents to do so, is to encourage their children to take a part-time job. The following paragraphs hold the main reasons for having such a viewpoint.
The first reason coming to mind is that if teenage children do a part-time job, they become more responsible about what they do and how they manage their time. Time management is a crucial ability in adult life, as adults need to have balance between their job, and their personal life, like: household tasks, their children related stuff, and other personal tasks out of job environment. Teenagers, during the time they have to do a part-time job and study, would also have a chance of practicing time management. If a teenager is accustomed to such situation, he is also more likely to handle his day time in a way that he can do his job and be a well-mannered parent at home as well.
Another reason to take into consideration is, such jobs provide teenage children with an opportunity to become fully or partially economically independent. This can be a good practice for their future life as they learn how to manage their budget, what to buy and when to buy it, and this way, not to ask others for money, but in turn, spend their money more logicallly. This can help them a lot in their adulthood, as they can not rely on others financially and they have to have a control over their money while having different expenditures.
To make it short, taking part time jobs is one of the best opportunities a teenage children can be provided with and parents should definitely encourage them to do that. It has a lot to offer to the teenage children, in terms of both time and budget management, which are crucial abilities in adult life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 26, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...nditures. To make it short, taking part time jobs is one of the best opportunities a...
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Line 13, column 84, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'child'?
Suggestion: child
...one of the best opportunities a teenage children can be provided with and parents should...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72988505747 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73858866611 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.6762283841 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.166666667 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08333333333 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437795072272 0.236089414692 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185489689769 0.076458572812 243% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131679077934 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.309525862181 0.150856017488 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0906131607655 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.75 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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