Do you agree or disagree with the following statements?
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's world, there are many things for every person to learn about and do. While some people try to do quite a lot of different things, others prefer to master a few matters. As far as I am concerned, it is better to master a handful of tasks rather than learn about everything. The reasons why I believe so will be discussed hereunder.
First, by doing many things, people lose their ability to concentrate on tasks. There is a possibility that they fail any or even all of them. When anyone has an obsession with doing many things, he or she has not enough time to learn about them thoroughly. As a result, they can not do it properly. In this regard, there is a famous Kurdish proverb, the equivalent of which in English may sound like this, "Anyone who does everything, knows nothing. My own experience demonstrates this reality. About fifteen years ago, when I was in high school, I had a friend who was always busy doing various stuff that he was barely able to attend school. He usually could not do his homework or assignments. He was playing soccer for the high school team and also, was in the singing group. He attended the English class after the school was closed, and also went to the gym. As I mentioned earlier, he was so busy that he was not able to do any of those tasks well. His grades were poor, and he got fired from the singing group. His after school activities were unsuccessful too.
Second, when people try many things, they feel they are brilliant and competent, which might be harmful in their future. Because of the shallow information about different things they have, they think they can do everything. As a result, they become overconfident, and this will hurt them in the future. For instance, when I was in university, studying Civil Engineering. I had a classmate. He was trying to become an expert in every aspect of Civil Engineering, such as roads, bridges, structures, dams. Because he knew a little in every field, he felt like a great engineer. Nevertheless, when he graduated from university, he could not find a job. He was not an expert in any field, and these days everyone looks for an expert to hire.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I strongly believe that people should not bother to do many things, because it will not be beneficial for them. If they learn a few things properly, they can be very successful in their life. Also, they will be able to concentrate on their important matters.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 786, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...eam and also, was in the singing group. He attended the English class after the sc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, may, nevertheless, second, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2029.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60090702948 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59464339577 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492063492063 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 14.0 3.51792114695 398% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0375781431 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.9655172414 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2068965517 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232450842248 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676722169544 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762421403712 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165005003646 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358464376941 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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